PEER REVIEWS:)

Samantha Phelps: 

Story Structure= 5 (Really good at presenting the different POV)

Characterization=3( Lacks a bit of dialogue to engage characters with story)

Ideas=4(Some ideas could use further development of a more clear explanation)

Developing Organization= 3( Perhaps use of more transitions to improve flow of story)

Specific Assignment Directions=5( Great job in presenting different POV clear and easy to follow)

Description= 3( Desscrptions lack more specific details)

Word Choice=4( Okay choice of varied words)

Sentence variety=4(Try to vary sentence structure and sophistication of organization of words)

Voice=5( Voice is heavily present)

Grammar/ Punctuation=5(Barely any grammatical errors)

Spelling and Word Usage= 5( No spelling mistakes but vary in word choice)

Overall assignment presentation=2(Double space? MLA format?)

TOTAL SCORE: 48 (B)

Overall, it was well structures and your voice was heavily present , but development of sentences and sentence variation could improve a bit more:)

Danielle del Rosario 

Story Structure= 4(Good structure but reorganize some events; some events I found to be necessary and pertinent and others not so much)

Characterization=5(Really good descriptions of settings and characters)

Ideas=3(Some ideas necessary and others not really, but easy to follow, just get rid of excess through your own judgement)

Designing Organization=5( Great way of organizing by time, clear gist of every event that occurred at designated time)

Specific Assignment Directions=5(Well done, folowed directions of Roshomon story, and covered the four different aspects)

Description=5(Great descriptions)

Word Choice= 5( Excellent choice of words; sophistacated)

Sentence Variety=4(Could improve on sophistication; example: My parents, my dad's best ffrien's family is too convoluted)

Voice/Sense of Audience=5(Voice is clear and unique to writer)

Grammar/ Punctuation=3.5(Revise, missing just a few commas in some areas and others not and apostrophes)

Spelling and Word Usage=5(Sophisticated but could use grammatical tweaking)

Overall Assignment Presentation=5(MLA and format requirements are followed)

TOTAL SCORE: 54.5 (B+)

Overall, great organization an d very easy to follow in the manner that you set up your story, but sentence variety, specifically style in terms of grammar and ideas are too loaded.

Alex DeWitt

Story Structure=5(Strong POV from the characters present)

Characterization=5(Dialogue and narration definately presnent and unique characters)

Ideas=4 (In some ideas jut get to the point and could provide some background and tarnsitions to better follow the events)

Designing/Organization=5(Coherent structure and easy to follow overall)

Specific AssignmentDirections=5( Followed Roshomon style an POV are clear)

Description=3( At points there is a lot of description make entire story a bit loaded and confusing, tone down on uneccessary description)

Word Choice=5(Great Word Choices)

Sentence Variety=5( Sophisticated sentence structure and variety present and clear throughout story)

Voice=3( Voice is somewhat present)

Grammar/ Punctuation=3 (Need to revise for punctuationa and some grammar mistakes)

Spelling and Word Usage=4( Very few spelling errors; example: Officer David Dyke)

Overall Assignemnt Presentation=1( Followed instructions, but no MLA format, double spacing, etc.)

TOTAL SCORE: 48 (B)

Overall, organization is well composed and points of view are heavily present, but revise as there are some grammar/spelling errors and MLA format is vital.