Danielle's Peer Reviews

Review for: Alex DeWitt

Story Structure: 4 – Establishes plot/setting/characters/pt of view: well established characters!

Characterization: 4 – Develops characters through dialogue, narration, & action: dialogue = good / some errors in grammar + word choice

Ideas: 4 – Develops ideas clearly; uses relevant details: development was clear & established

Designing Organization: 3 – Establishes but does not always maintain an appropriate focus; some inconsistencies in sequence of ideas: sometimes it was difficult to follow the story in character perspectives

Specific Assignment Directions: 5 – Exceeds all requirements specified for this assignment: length of the paper is excellent / can tell that you were motivated & interested in writing this assignment

Description: 4 – Assignment uses concrete language, literary devices, & sensory detail: descriptive writing well done

Word Choice: 4 –Effective word choices: slang in dialogue actually worked well

Sentence Variety: 3 – Occasional use of sentence variety: could use some shorter sentence variations

Voice / Sense of Audience: 4 – Evident awareness of voice & audience

Grammar/Punctuation: 3 – Errors occasionally interfere with communication; verb tense errors: check dialogue errors / distracts the reader when the paper is not double checked for capitalizations and simple grammar errors

Spelling/Word Usage: 4 – Mostly correct spelling & word usage: double check work, esp. in dialogue

Overall Assignment Presentation: 3 – Incomplete heading; average title/presentation: create innovative title / fix presentation – looks rushed in writing

Total Score: 45

Assessment: The best aspect of this assignment: Character dialogues were good & well established minus the grammatical errors.

One aspect of this assignment that may require further revision is: Read through the story to ensure punctuation, grammar, & word choice are accurate, correct, and presentable.

The grade I would give this assignment is: B+

Review for: Samantha Phelps

Story Structure: 5 – Establishes strong plot/ setting/ character/ pt. of view: well done in establishing environment + point of views – clearly defines each characters point

Characterization: 4 – Develops characters through dialogue, narration, & action: well done w/ points for each character

Ideas: 5 – Develops ideas clearly & fully; uses a wide range of relevant details: Established the issue quick and flows properly & effectively

Designing Organization: 5 – Maintains a clear focus; exhibits a logical, coherent structure through appropriate transitions: Easy structure clearly helps the reader follow each perspective

Specific Assignment Directions: 4 – Meets all requirements for this assignment: excellent structure

Description: 4 – Assignment uses concrete language, literary devices, & sensory detail: sensory detail used well with beginning paragraphs – in context with your perspective

Word Choice: 5 – Uses sophisticated precise vocabulary: words like “prance”, “derogatory”, “rambunctious” were excellent

Sentence Variety: 4 – Good sentence structure & variety: sentence variety could vary a little more / there is a range of extended sentences

Voice / Sense of Audience: 5 – Unique voice; strong sense of audience

Grammar/Punctuation: 4 – Mostly correct grammar, errors do not interfere with communication: few grammar errors & sentence errors / nothing that distracts the context

Spelling/Word Usage: 4 – Mostly correct spelling & word usage: well used vocabulary

Overall Assignment Presentation: 3 – Incomplete heading; average title/presentation: missing heading / though title is included

Total Score: 52

Assessment: The best aspect of this assignment: The introduction is excellent and each perspective is clear and well written it allows the reader to follow easily without confusion.

One aspect of this assignment that may require further revision is: I understand that each new perspective was what was said, but maybe find alternative methods to narrate it as if it is not all a dialogue. Or I may have just perceived it that way.

The grade I would give this assignment is: A

Review for: Karen Alvarez

Story Structure: 3 – Some elements of story structure; little blending of dialogue and narration: Needs improvement on transitions from each perspective

Characterization: 4 – Develops characters through dialogue, narration & action: less redundancy w/ perspectives, I was slightly confused w/ transition from person 1 to 2 because it seemed like similar ideas

Ideas: 4 – Develops ideas clearly; uses relevant details: idea is well established & reiterated

Designing Organization: 4 – Maintains a clear focus; exhibits a logical sequence of ideas through appropriate transitions: transitions need improvement – logically follows ideas

Specific Assignment Directions: 4 – Meets all requirements specified for this assignment

Description: 3 – Some use of concrete language, literary devices, & sensory detail in assignment: sensory details need more specificity

Word Choice: 3 – Some effective word choices: some words don’t flow with sentences / especially in beginning paragraph the some word choices sound like they were searched on a thesaurus and just substituted – doesn’t necessary flow well sounds stiff

Sentence Variety: 4 – Good sentence structure & variety: excellent sentence variations

Voice / Sense of Audience: 4 – Evident awareness of voice & audience

Grammar/Punctuation: 4 – Mostly correct grammar; errors do not interfere with communication: Beginning paragraphs need word w/grammar

Spelling/Word Usage: 4 – Mostly correct spelling & word usage: some words do not flow well with sentence context / don’t rely on thesaurus for words, check if the word is being used under the right context

Overall Assignment Presentation: 5 – MLA heading; unique title; professional presentation

Total Score: 46

Assessment: The best aspect of this assignment: Clearly defining the idea & issue with getting to LA Staples Center to get priority tickets

One aspect of this assignment that may require further revision is: There seemed to be redundancy in the first two perspectives, which was slightly boring and confusing – clearly defining perspectives need work.

The grade I would give this assignment is: B