Katie Walsh Peer Review

Katie Walsh Peer Reviews

Lauren Jyo

Story Structure- 4 could use more character thoughts from their different perspectives after conflict

Characterization- 5 good use of quotes and background

Ideas- 5 Sometimes there was too many details that made the story confusing but overall good

Designing Organization- 5 Good with chronological order

Specific Assignment Directions- 4 Good but needs more on the conflict from all of the characters

Description- 5 Good use of imagery

Word Choice- 5 Good 

Sentence Variety- 5 Good

Voice/ Sense of Audience- 5 Entertaining for audience

Grammar/ Punctuation- 4 Some of the tenses switched making it hard to follow

Spelling and Word Usage- 5 no errors I saw

Overall assignment presentation- 4 First paragraph indent/ double space

Assessment: The best aspect of this assignment is...the story is entertaining- I wanted to keep reading because of the imagery and drama

One aspect of this assignment that may require further revision is...The conflict was too far into the story and didn't allow for the characters thoughts and perspectives after

The grade I would give:A-

Maddie Sillivos

Story Structure- 4 Could be longer with more thoughts from all of the characters

Characterization- 5 All characters had good and different voices

Ideas- 3 There is a lot more each character could say so the paper felt very short

Designing Organization- 5 Switching between characters were good transitions and inner thoughts were awesome

Specific Assignment Directions- 4 A little short from lack of thoughts from characters

Description- 4 The narration is good but a little background could help make it longer

Word Choice- 5 A little informal but good for audience

Sentence Variety- 5 Loved it!

Voice/ Sense of Audience- 4 Good use of different voices, just needs more thoughts

Grammar/ Punctuation- 5 could not find any errors

Spelling and Word Usage- 5 Good

Overall assignment presentation- 4 Single space heading

Assessment: The best aspect of this assignment is...the interesting blend of inner and outer thoughts and dialogue

One aspect of this assignment that may require further revision is...A longer story with more character thoughts

The grade I would give: B+

Diamond Fischer

Story Structure- 4 Good background and narration but could use more thoughts from after the conflict

Characterization- 4 Good character voice but need one more perspective

Ideas- 4 some details are irrelevent and only talking about once but the ideas are powerful

Designing Organization- 4 Some details confuse the reader

Specific Assignment Directions- 3 Need one more perspective

Description- 5 Good sense of scene and narration

Word Choice- 5 Good word choice

Sentence Variety- 4 Some sentences are choppy and could be combined

Voice/ Sense of Audience- 5 Good use of different voices

Grammar/ Punctuation- 4 In some places it seemed like words were missing

Spelling and Word Usage- 5 ^ otherwise good

Overall assignment presentation- 4 Teachers name, last name, page number, and double space

Assessment: The best aspect of this assignment is... the very different character's perspectives and heartfelt story

One aspect of this assignment that may require further revision is... Need one more perspective

The grade I would give: B