APAM 298 Peer Evaluations

Creative Writing Evaluation

Name of Whose Work You Are Working On: Diamond Fischer

 Evaluator: Lauren Jyo

Meaning/Content: 8

Story Structure: 4

-The structure of your story had a developed plot and setting which was at a house for your birthday party

Characterization: 4

-Used details to develop you, your mom and your friend who was White to show both of their points of view.

Development: 4

Ideas: 4

-Used an adequate amount of details in your story.  Could have elaborated more about the part when you guys were watching 13 going on 30 and it made the girl feel uncomfortable.

Organization:  9

Designing Organization: 4

-This essay is structured in an organized manner.  The different perspectives were clearly identified in each paragraph

Specific Assignment Directions: 4

-I think you had only 3 perspectives of the conflict. 

Language Use: 16

Description: 3

-This essay could have used more literary devices and sensory detail such as thought process and what the character was doing at certain moments.

Word Choice: 3

-Incorporated an adequate amount of intellectual vocabulary

Sentence Variety: 4

-I found a couple of awkward sentences that could be restructured but other than that I got the idea of what you were trying to say.

Voice/Sense of Audience: 5

-Strong sense of voice throughout the essay especially while narrating it through each perspective. 

Conventions: 12

Grammar/Punctuation: 3

-The essay was mostly correct however there were a couple of grammatical errors and I think “god mother” and “god” should be capitalized. 

Spelling and Word Usage: 5

-From what I read all words were spelled correctly.

Overall Assignment Presentation: 4

-For MLA formatting, missing page numbers, creative title and header should only be on the first page.

TOTAL SCORE:  49

Assessment

-The best aspect of your essay is hearing the way you told the story from the different perspectives rather than having a dialogue.  It was an interesting story. 

-One aspect that may require further revision would be elaborating about the story in more detail.

The grade I would give this assignment is: B

Name of Whose Work You Are Working On: Maddie Sillivos

Evaluator: Lauren Jyo

Meaning/Content: 8

Story Structure: 4

-The structure of your story had a developed plot but the setting was a bit unclear at times.

Characterization: 4

-Characters were well developed in the form of a dialogue between each other but introduce the characters more would have been good.

Development: 4

Ideas: 4

-Used an adequate amount of details and ideas in the story.  Elaborate more on setting and personalities of characters  

Organization:  8

Designing Organization: 4

-The essay was broken up into good sized paragraphs but some unnecessary indentions

Specific Assignment Directions: 4

-Incorporated four different perspectives revolving around a particular conflict.

Language Use: 16

Description: 4

-Good at providing more creative actions about what characters were doing exactly at the time. 

Word Choice: 3

-Incorporated a sufficient amount of high vocabulary

Sentence Variety: 5

-Sentences weren’t too wordy or redundant. 

Voice/Sense of Audience: 4

-Strong sense of voice between the character although it kind of gets confusing on who is talking to who.   

Conventions: 14

Grammar/Punctuation: 4

-The essay was mostly correct however there were a couple of grammatical errors.  Some commas in awkward parts of the sentence

Spelling and Word Usage: 5

-From what I read all words were spelled correctly.

Overall Assignment Presentation: 5

-Followed proper MLA format

TOTAL SCORE:  50

Assessment

-The best aspect of your essay is hearing the different perspectives of each of your friend’s about the incident.  I thought the conflict or main idea was really juicy and interesting.  I also liked the dialogue between the characters

-One aspect that may require further revision would be elaborating about the story in more detail.

The grade I would give this assignment is: B

Creative Writing Evaluation

Name of Whose Work You Are Working On: Katie Walsh

Evaluator: Lauren Jyo

Meaning/Content:8

Story Structure: 4

-The structure of your story had a developed plot but the setting was a bit unclear at times.

Characterization: 4

-Characters were well developed in the form of a dialogue between each other. 

Development: 4

Ideas: 4

-Used a good amount of details and ideas about the who situation within the friend group.  

Organization:  10

Designing Organization: 5

-This essay is structured in an organized manner.  Paragraphs weren’t too long.

Specific Assignment Directions: 5

-Clearly described four different perspectives within the story 

Language Use: 17

Description: 4

-This essay could have used more literary devices and sensory detail such as more information about the characters to get a better idea of where they’re coming from

Word Choice: 4

-Incorporated a sufficient amount of high vocabulary

Sentence Variety: 5

-Sentences weren’t too wordy or redundant. 

Voice/Sense of Audience: 4

-Strong sense of voice between the character although it kind of gets confusing on who is talking to who.   

Conventions: 14

Grammar/Punctuation: 4

-The essay was mostly correct however there were a couple of grammatical errors.  Some commas in awkward parts of the sentence

Spelling and Word Usage: 5

-From what I read all words were spelled correctly.

Overall Assignment Presentation: 5

-Followed proper MLA format

TOTAL SCORE:  53

Assessment

-The best aspect of your essay is hearing the different perspectives of each of your friend’s about the incident.  There was the rational one on one hand then the blunt one who blurted the racist remark.  

-One aspect that may require further revision would be elaborating about the story in more detail.

The grade I would give this assignment is: A-