Peer Reviews

Nick Barba:

1. 5 - Definitely a strong plot!

2. 3- the perspectives are good, but there could be some more dialoge

3. 5 - well-elaborated

4. 5 - I think there was firm focus

5. 5 - Yupp!

6. 3.5 - There could've been more sensory/specific details.

7. 4- you could use a litle more word variety

8. 5- Good sentence variety

9. 5- I could sense the Unique voice as I was reading

10. 4 - Just make sure to proofread for small errors

11. 5- Good!

12. 4 - make sure to use Times New Romans font!

Score; 53.5/60

Best Aspect: The structure of the story. The 4 perspectives are woven together very well!

Revise: Just add more dialogue and specific details

Grade: B+

Jerralyn Satro:

1.1 - This was moreso an essay with claims and supports/evidence than a story with character developement. There were no specific characters to follow.

2.3 - The self is the only character that can be seen changing over time?

3. 5 - There are definitely clear ideas.

4. 5 - There is clear focus.

5. 1 - This is an essay and not a story

6. 4 - Lots f good detail!

7.-11. 5 - Can't complain

12. 4 - Don't make the title bold. Also the professor name should be above the class name.

Score: 48/60

Best Aspect: Good grammar and good points are made.

Revise: Although this was a good essay, it is simply that, an essay. It was not a story with conflict that was seen from 4 different perspectives. If I were grading an essay, it would have been great, but I have to grade off a short story standpoint. For the revision, just apply what was used in this essay to a story with four different experiences.

Grade: C

Megan Ho:

1.-11. 5 - I hnoestly can say that I have nothing but fives for all of these points. Very well written and organized.

12. 4 - Just make sure that page numbers are on the right side of the page!

Best Aspect: Very Well Done! I loved the four different perspectives and there was also lots of specific details.

Revise: Maybe just add more dialogue.

Grade: A+

Erin Griley:

1. 5 - Very Well done! Loved the concept

2. 3 - There could have been more use of dialogue

3. 5 - The details were pretty much on point. Well-structured.

4. 5 - It all flowed well. Knew the direction you were going, but also suprised that you included the thief's perspective as well.

5. 5 - The conflict was pretty clear

6. 4 - Try adding more detail to your brother and father's perspectives

7. 5 - Good use of diverse vocab.

8. 5- There's variety, can always add more though.

9. 5 -  The sense of voice is clear.

10.-12. 5 - All good!

Score: 57/60

Best Aspect: The structure! Loved how you included the car- jacker perspective!

Revise: Just include more dialogue and more specific details in your dad and brother's perspectives.

Grade: A